A poem featuring slant rhyme in response to Grace’s request at dVerse.
here strong young trout stir restless in their lair
the chill of current makes them brash and bold
morning hatch has them eager to explode
up through ripples into the morning air
from Spring’s stream so crystal clear, snow melt cold
I walk the bank alert but stay composed
searching for the best stream side view, of where
the chill of current has trout brash and bold
it’s in the brisk slack water big ones hold
ready to strike the tempting air borne fare
as Spring streams run crystal clear, snow melt cold
soon a mountain stream drama will unfold
when a mighty rainbow engulfs its prey
‘cause chill of current made it brash and bold
oh what a mighty wonder to behold
a rainbow breaking water with a flair
when Spring streams run crystal clear, snow melt cold
and chill of current makes trout brash and bold
Wonderful use of the villanelle to illuminate the cycles of life.
Thank you Kerfe… 🙂
Good one, Rob. I don’t entirely get the slant rhyme rules, but I enjoyed your poem.
I don’t fully grasp it, but I wrote a Villanelle with tight rhyme and rhythm, and then here and there substituted words that worked in the piece, but only sort’a rhymed.
I also inserted one enjambment for hoots. Glad you like it Jane… 🙂 Gonna come check yours out.
A rainbow breaking water with a flair…oh I love this line! Sounds like you may like to fish?
Fly fishing the pristine mountain wilderness streams in the Pacific Northewst is Zen in Paradise! Yes Mary, I love fly fishing! 🙂
I love this time of spring, when we see the trout (and other fish) making their way in stream. And to see that rainbow breaking over the water is a wonderful sight.
Slant rhymes give a poem a different sound & pattern and takes getting used to. Thanks for joining in Rob in our villanelle form challenge.
You are welcome Grace. Like Gary Snyder, I love writing about wild nature!
How beautiful.
Thank you Nathan…!
Great images from a fisherman’s perspective
Thanks
I can sense the fisherman spirit in your poem.
Love my fly fishing True! 🙂
The cycling of the form and the cycle of life work well together. I think you’ve created a great villanelle here. I like the playfulness of the rainbow – captures the curving motion and the colour of the leaping fish, but in another element altogether.
Thank you Sarah for your gracious words! I am pleased you enjoyed this… 🙂