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I bring my hand
gently to your mouth
quiet your voice
for I am certain
if you loose your words
into this twisted world
they’ll be distorted
if you raise your song
over this deafened land
it will be lost
should your truth escape
into this barren place
it will die
of loneliness
if you free your love
in this frigid time
there will be no place
it can find warmth
save here
within my hand
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rob kistner © 2009
Nicely done. i like it.
Really enjoyed this. I liked how you’d broken up the poem into even single line stanzas. And the message within.
Presentation, execution, theme…all well done.
Sometimes a person reaches a point in poetry where the words they write conspire to compete to be the best in a great poem. I think you have done that here. I have read many pieces of your poetry, but this one is truly, poetry. I enjoyed your poem.
your poetry is inspiring. I is my old friend Directorman,
if you know were he is have him contact me.
I will be in Oregon mid september.
Sturdyman
Thank you Anthony… 😉
Gordon –
I appreciate your kind words — thank you!
…rob
Mark –
You’re most gracious…
…rob
Donald –
I am truly humbled by your words…
This piece came upon me quite unexpectedly. I was endeavoring to respond to prompt #88 at RWP, and had a clutter of unfinished drafts.
In among the early drafts was the line, “I bring my hand gently to your mouth”. When I revisited it, this poem began to unfold — much of it in near stream of consciousness.
I don’t know if its a lament, a love poem, if its dark, or if its somehow hopeful — but I am pleased it spoke to you…
…rob
Wally –
What a wonderful surprise! I will email you my cell number. Please call, it would be a pleasure to see you when you’re here… 😉
…rob (Directorman)
I liked this. I could see the exchange here in my mind. Good pacing and line breaks, too — they kind of string you along (in a good way). Good job.
-Nicole
Nicole –
Nice to have you visit again, and thank you for your kind words… 😉
…rob
I like the photograph and this verse. Much to think about.