February Rain

“Original version of this poem posted here on October 25th as “Come February”. It was in the 1st person. Rewriting this one in 3rd person, from my perspective, shifts the essence from feeling personally sad to feeling empathy for another.”

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February Rain
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here he is
wishing wishes
for those days
when life made sense
thinking thoughts
that tear at him
for the things
he failed to be

how he does desire
the damp dreary days
of february
when his forlorned
fallen face
is commonplace

when no one intrudes
to question
what’s the matter
when they see
the tears he cries
there come no why’s

because all around
are caught up in the blues

oh if only
she could find it
in her heart

to forgive
this sadly lost
and broken man

who much too late
understands
he was a fool

and in his sorrow
understands
love will not stir

but how he wishes
ill-tempered weather
would occur

to drive the joyful
all around him
to indoor spaces

so he’d be spared
the pain
of smiling faces

and the bitter
bitter memory
of losing her

~ ~ ~

rob kistner © 2019

 

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  • 17 thoughts on “February Rain”

    1. Yes.. I agree it totally changes the sense… in this one we can share a compassion for the poor man, in first person you are begging for compassion… I think this is something we can do also when writing about ourselves to join the reader in observing ourselves from the outside.

    2. I really love the new title and sure wish I could cheer this guy up … but he’s averse to smiles, so it wouldn’t work, I suppose. I do hope he finds healing.

      1. Thank you Ken. I agree. The first person makes the pain personal, and as such, more accute. But this 3rd person write makes it about empathy for another, so the pain cannot be felt do accutely.

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