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young flower fresh-bloomed
engorged with succulence
bursting with life’s urgency
vibrantly seductive
dewy lips of supple petal
lay open in offered sweet delight
velvet pistil of gentle blush
enwrapped in throat of golden hue
this vision of tender ecstasy
entices with a lilting sway
a fragrance to intoxicate
wafting from the luscious folds
breathing in the rich bouquet
all senses stirred and tantalized
my eyes embrace this visage rare
pleasured in the heady moment
captive by such vital beauty
consumed, one savors slowly
exquisitely delicious
this tender bud, full bloomed
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(minimalist version)
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young flower
fresh-bloomed
engorged
bursting
seductive
supple petals lay open
velvet pistil
soft in golden throat
lilting fragrant folds
stir the senses
consumed
one savors slowly
exquisite
this tender bud
full bloomed
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rob kistner © 2010
Very nice, Rob.
There are so many writing prompts one could follow. I don’t think I can take on any more, though the ones at Magpie may impel me.
Hot and sweet. Well done. Mine will go up on Tuesday.
love it as always , mwah Rob
Rob–
Sensual dramatic and bold, yet simultaneously fragile. I am mesmerized by the grace of your words intoxicating my senses.
Joanny
Lovely work, sounds sweet and sensual!
Sensitive sensual exotic flowing verse which reminds me of being in this moment with all it’s simple richness. Thank-you Rob!
Joanny’s word choice is right: bold but fragile.
Maureen, are there other groups like Magpie out there?
I could see it all….” this visage rare”… thrilled here because am seeing such vibrant colors on trees against a wonderful landscape…portrait like. This captured so well what my heart wanted to say 🙂
Dear Rob: Thank-you for the lovely music on the page. It is very peaceful. Namaste.
Evocative, quite lovely.
wonderful…the second one sounded even more lovely after reading the first one…Thanks Rob
I love the ‘throat of golden hue’ the whole poem was very sensual and so beautiful. I am envious!
Christine
As ever, bounteously blessed poetry, rich in images and sensuality …Loved both the versions.
Practically x-rated, Rob! Lovely lyrical flow to this (I prefer the longer one!)
If I could write like this . . .
Oh, god, if I could write like this . . .
Rob, I hardly know what to say, except . . .
This is exotic, wonderful, amazing.
Thank you.
The first verse of the longer version is my favorite bit. I like the voluptuousness of it.
Arousing and sensually steamy. A picture painted so well with words. Very visual and tactile, well done.
Elegantly erotic.
Totally involving! Both versions are so good..I lean toward the shorter..falling too fast!
Yowza! Beautiful, sensual, erotic. And I love your two explorations. Well done Rob.
I wasn’t sure that reading this at the office was the best idea, but I made it through without blushing too much. But it sure did evoke a Not-Appropriate-For-The-Office image! Nice!
Both very, very nice but I think I prefer the minimalist version! Actually, both together is best!
oh you do know how to weave the words to engage the senses…great magpie!