Original DDE™ surrealistic art entitled “The Slayer Cometh” by: rob kistner © 9/16/24
Slowing my heartbeat
steadying my breath
I turn the key
the lock clicks
the door unseats
fate’s dealt this hand
I’m both prisoner
and executioner
in this deadly game
silver blade poised
swinging the lair’s door open
I enter
whispering
tonight you die…
vampire
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rob kistner © 2024
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You make this scene come alive with dramatic tension, Rob, and the first-person narrative makes it all the more heart-poundingly effective! Loved it, every finely described detail.
Thank you so much Dora. Really loved he prompt my friend. 🙂
I agree with Dora – the use of first person amplifies the tension. The narrative was gripping, and I enjoyed feeling the narrator’s determination.
Thank you Nicole. I am pleased that you enjoyed this. 🙂
I agree it is very dramatic, filled with tension. As a little girl I wanted to be a vampire slayer lol! Wonderful vampire slayer poem.
It’s never too late Di… 😉
OMG!!! how terrifing
Bravo Rob.
Thanks for dropping by to read mine
much?love
I am pleased this engaged you Gillena, and you are welcome my friend… 🙂
Being a slayer is really tense… I thought it was a wooden stake.
Wooden stake, silver knives, each are weapons against the unholy in different lore.
Two for the price of one, Rob! I agree with Dora and Nicole about the first-person perspective. The short lines in the first one create tension, like we are creeping up in the vampire with the slayer.
I was of two minds — so… Thank you Kim, I appreciate your kind words… 🙂
Eek! A nailbitter.
But what an adrenaline rush Katie… 🙂
Finally, a saver instead of a mere chronicler!!!
It was my Boy Scout training Judy, my “Slayer of the Unholy” merit badge to be specific… 😉
I’ve always admired those brave enough to enter the lair of the monster, determined to slay it. I’d like to see evil get slain with music that pierces and obliterates their dark hearts.
Some Lisa, unfortunately, are too dark or cold for music to penetrate. Then a wooden stake or pure silver blade will pierce just fine. I keep one of each on hand my friend… 😉
Stab away, RK
Thank you Ron, I will! 😉
Hi Rob, this is a great action poem. I reminded me of the ending of Bram Stoker’s Dracula.
Pleased you liked it Robbie — thank you… 🙂