To Fly

 
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To want to fly — the fantasy
that many likely dream
to swoop about
arms spread straight out
so giddy one would scream

soar off the ground — be light as air
zoom high above rooftops
to be weightless
to feel no stress
you’d pray it never stops

to ride the thermals when you’d want
right up there with the birds
you’d feel so free
so much you’d see
one could not find the words

excited — breathless — wonderful
so joyful you might cry
how to express
such happiness
see me world — I can fly

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rob kistner © 2022
 

~ This is a version of the poem in nearly pure “Roundabout Form”. ~

To want to fly — the fantasy
caught up in freedom’s dream
arms spread straight out
you swoop about
caught up in freedom’s dream

pierce through the clouds — like a light beam
zoom high — above rooftops
to be weightless
to feel no stress
so high — above rooftops

riding the thermals — all fear stops
swept up in happiness
so much you’d see
you’d feel so free
swept up in happiness

excited — you’d be just breathless
flying so joyfully
ride the jet stream
lost in your dream
flying so joyfully

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rob kistner © 2022

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46 thoughts on “To Fly”

  1. Hi Rob – I love the high flying feeling of this poem but its not a Roundabout! the regime is quite tricky — do check again
    aBccB bCddC cDaaD dAbbA (the capitals denote the repeat lines)

    would not take much to rewrite accordingly as you are nearly there
    – there is an example poem with the prompt for added help

    1. I went back and looked more closely Laura. Now I have posted a pure roundabout. I left my original poem also following the pure roundabout. Thank you for pointing that out Laura, I didn’t catch it the first time. 😉

      1. Bravo Rob – still flying but round and round the Rounadbout! Some really good lines summarized in the feeling of being
        “caught up in freedom’s dream” and subtle rhymes within the stricture of the structure!

        1. Thank you Laura. I hadn’t paid close attention. I think ~ actually I know 😉 ~ I rebel subconsciously against strictly prescribed form. They can be fun, like a puzzle, but I reach my most authentic expression when I write unrestrained. I am not a student of poetry, I am a student of short free-form communicating of emotion and atmosphere. Writing the Roundabout was fun though. 🙂

  2. Another wonderful poem, my friend. I have dreamt of flying many a nights. Once in a dream I sprouted wings. The fantasy of flight took off in your poem full of delight.

  3. Rob, the way you dream about flying, it tells me that you flew in a previous life or that you will fly in your next life. I see you as tall, colorful bird that wades along fresh waters, yet also flies high over the mountains <3

  4. I enjoyed both versions, and well done for transforming the first one to a roundabout. I was zooming up there with you, ‘caught up in freedom’s dream’. I like the slight change in the second stanza from ‘zoom high — above rooftops’ to ‘so high — above rooftops’.

  5. I used to dream of flying and usually it included falling. I don’t think I want to fly anymore but I would swim if the water is warm. I forgot that psychedelic Beatles song was called Flying. Good to hear.

  6. Luv your rhymes and the lightness in your poem.
    I too didn’t get it right. There are do many elements to this form.
    I spent some of my insomnia hours at it again last night. Think i got it now. I even started another one today.
    Wont be beaten by this form

    Have a nice weekend

    Much?love

    1. I hear you Gillena. It is not difficult to write a Roundabout, but it is confusing to keep track of what is supposed to rhyme with what. I am nit a natural fan of convoluted poetic forms. For me, they dilute and confuse the emotion snd atmosphere that I enjoy presenting.

  7. Your poem makes me wish I could fly. I really like that you shared both versions. It isn’t often that we get a window into another’s process. Thanks for sharing.

  8. The closest I’ve got to that sense of flying and freedom is paragliding which I tried a long time ago. But to be up there with the birds- how marvellous is that thought!

  9. Those repeated lines are really tricky… good work in transforming. I do love the idea in writing about flying.

    1. The Roundabout was fun Bjorn, as a puzzle can be fun. But I feel my less restrained version of “To Fly”, best expresses my soul’s emotions, regarding what I was envisioning.

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